Again, very strange clothing lines in this show.
This outfit looks mis-matched on this model, and from the look on her face I think she's thinking the same !!
Technically it's a great photo - there's a much noticably darker background then the NYC shows so she isnt getting as much isolation, same for the foreground - there isnt enough light for the face as the eyes arent lit up enough to get that sparkle that works so well, but this is no fault of yours ( and nothing you cant fix when editing ! )
I was looking at this shot here you took http://www.fotothing.com/fredaFunSite/photo/9402f8b9dbf129a1bc81e466409acb07/ just to double check the huge difference in lighting between the 2.
Shelby was right - lighting is everything ;)